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#1 Mar 28, 2010 6:44 PM
- cooldude22345
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Shallow Victory (IF YOU READ IT, PLEASE REVIEW!)
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#2 Mar 28, 2010 9:26 PM
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Re: Shallow Victory (IF YOU READ IT, PLEASE REVIEW!)
You might wanna get those censored...I mean little kids still come in here and once they read this...Well trolling and Rage galore.
Also Nice story i found it intersting
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#3 Mar 28, 2010 9:51 PM
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Re: Shallow Victory (IF YOU READ IT, PLEASE REVIEW!)
A little on the violent side but very interesting indeed. Yeah you always have to consider the fact that younger children can come on here, so it's always best to watch what you post but it's interesting none the less.
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#4 Mar 28, 2010 10:13 PM
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Re: Shallow Victory (IF YOU READ IT, PLEASE REVIEW!)
Thanks guys. And I put it as a spoiler, so I guess that helps...
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#5 Apr 17, 2010 1:23 PM
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Re: Shallow Victory (IF YOU READ IT, PLEASE REVIEW!)
Certainly interesting, I almost expected her to go all gooey and return to normal. The end was satisfyingly final. My only complaint is that it's not much of a story, just an ending. I suppose I just naturally dislike mini-stories. Cynder felt realistically sadistic, and Spyro had good moments as well. Over all, pretty good.
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#6 Apr 20, 2010 2:27 PM
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Re: Shallow Victory (IF YOU READ IT, PLEASE REVIEW!)
Interestingly dark! <3 but, I do agree with the others (Don't worry, at least it's not like the fanfics I use to make on my disabled account. ._.; they were *shudders* ). It's great though, keep up the good work.
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#7 Apr 26, 2010 1:02 PM
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Re: Shallow Victory (IF YOU READ IT, PLEASE REVIEW!)
it was good 
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#8 May 01, 2010 12:34 AM
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