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#1 Oct 03, 2010 7:08 PM
- The Mad Thatter
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Cynder Oneshot
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#2 Dec 22, 2010 6:52 AM
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Re: Cynder Oneshot
I must say that I am impressed. I am so pleased with the way you developed the idea that maybe behind Cynder's dark side, there was a small helpless whelping. Amazing!
The only thing i suggest is to step back on colloquialisms. The thing is that the common 'slang' does not sound good in general literature, and especially a character how does not use that kind of language, per say.
Besides that, I give you five stars! ^_^
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