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#26 Apr 27, 2009 10:51 AM

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Re: Fireball Season 2

Question, er, do guns exist in this time? Actually, yeah, I think they do. Pay no attention to me.
Anyway, it's still looking good.

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#27 May 09, 2009 5:50 PM

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Re: Fireball Season 2

Chapter 14 AutoMay
The Tree began to shake and out of the ground grew AutoMay.
"A Tree?" I asked.
"Yes I'm a tree you dragon dung!" roared Automay as he shot one of his roots at Fireball.
Fireball dodged and shot a fireball at Automay.
AutoMay's right arm cot on fire.
AutoMay roared.
I sprewed a Fireball at AutoMay's other arm.
AutoMay roared again.
His 50 roots dug through the tree. coming out of verious places.
Fireball flew up in the air and shot another fireball.
AutoMay made a shield with his already on fire arms.
The roots grabbed Fireball and squeezed him.
Fireball burnt them and meleed AutoMay in the face.
AutoMay's gigantic size fell over.
I attacked his body until he got back up.
AutoMay swirled around, making the fire go everywhere.
I burnt AutoMay's chest.
AutoMay's chest blew up and he fell to the ground.
"No!!!!!!" roared AutoMay as he turned to ashes.
I walked up to a wooden shrine.
A trapped dragon was there.
I rescued it and gave it the key, "go free everyone in Autumn Forest."
"Okay." said the Dragon as he made a portal, "This portal leads to Spring Plains."
I walked through it, "Thanks."

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#28 May 10, 2009 4:10 PM

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Re: Fireball Season 2

Sounds good, but who's point of view is it written from? It can't be Fireball's because you use his name in text. You kept switching from first to third person.

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#29 May 12, 2009 10:10 PM

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Re: Fireball Season 2

I am now switching to 1st person.

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#30 Jun 03, 2009 8:29 PM

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Re: Fireball Season 2

Also, the title is being changed to Fireball: A new age.

Chapter 15 Spring plains

I went down a path and saw 10 greeks walking across a bridge.
I ran across the bridge and flamed them.
Wrong move. The bridge caught on fire and I fell to the ground.
I got back up and walked down the path.
I reached a fork in the path.
Going left I found a trapped dragon.
"Help me!" cried the dragon.
"I'll come back for you." I replied.
I went back to the fork and went right.
I reached a cliff and a trapped dragon.
"This is the legendary Flower Power cliff. Also, could you help me?" asked the dragon.
"I'll send someone back to you." replied Fireball.
"Okay." responded the dragon.

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#31 Jun 04, 2009 6:31 AM

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Re: Fireball Season 2

Hey, I'm doing a list to see who I can comment and how. How do you take harsh, but fair critisiscm, i.e. "Your spelling is terrible, you should check through it" or "Your story's kinda boring, spice it up"?

I know what you're all thinking, and it was either this or I hurt EVERYONE's feelings.

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#32 Jun 04, 2009 6:21 PM

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The Spelling. >__<

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#33 Jun 04, 2009 7:36 PM

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... It was an example... Don't freak out...

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#34 Jun 04, 2009 8:04 PM

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Note to self: Never flame enemies on a wooden bridge.  wink

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#35 Jun 05, 2009 3:22 PM

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Ow. Staple in the wings. That has to hurt.  :-|

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#37 Jun 06, 2009 1:47 PM

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#38 Jun 09, 2009 8:06 PM

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Re: Fireball Season 2

big_smile Ya gotta love killer bees.

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#39 Jun 13, 2009 7:06 PM

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Chapter 19 Hot Head

I flew to the bee King's lair and found a dragon.
"Where do you want to go?" asked the Dragon.
"Summer Hideaway, please." I replied.
"Very well." said the dragon as a portal appeared.
I went through the portal and appeared in Summer Hideaway's park.
I searched the park, the tree houses, and the River, but couldn't find the Orb.
I went out onto the beach where I fought Wave and saw a huge shack that I hadn't checked.
A Dragon stood at the door, "Welcome to the Dragon Lua Shack."
I went inside and walked up to the steps and into a room with a hot fire.
The Fire flared as a Fire Man walked out of the fire.
Hot Head shot fire at me.
I dodged and ran out the room, looking for water.
Hot Head chased me around the Shack until I found a sink and a bucket of water.
I through the water at Hot Head.
Hot Head roared as he grew smaller.
Hot Head shot fireballs at the Sink and destroyed it.
I ran away and Hot Head followed.
I took the bucket into a bedroom with a water bed and got some water out of it.
I throug hteh water at Hot Head.
Ulmost done.
Hot Head torched the bed and chased me around the shack until I found a fish tank.
I got some water out of it and through it at Hot Head, defeating him.
The Crystal orb was on the ground.
I picked up the Crystal Orb and walked out of the Shack.

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#41 Jun 18, 2009 4:13 AM

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Chapter 21 Stone Guardian

The ground began to shatter and I grabbed the Hatchlings and then fell down the cavern with the Adults dragons.
I landed on the ground and let the Hatchlings down.
The other Dragons landed aswell.
"Thankyou for saving my baby!" thanked the dragon from before.
"Your welcome." I replied.
"The only thing I have to repay you is this Crystal Orb I found hidden in that dragon's scabard." said the dragon.
"Thanks!" I replied as I took the orb and walked up to another dragon.
"Would you like to go to Summer Hideaway, Autumn Forest, or Spring Plains?" asked the dragon.
"Autumn Forest please." I replied.
The dragon brung up a portal, "Here ya go!"
"Thanks!" I said as I went through the portal.
I appeared in Autumn Forest.
I walked down the leaf lane and went underground to the Underground maze.
I went to where the drill was and saw a new passageway.
I walked down the passageway and saw a huge stone room.
Suddenly, a huge chunk of Stone came alive  and attached to other pieces of Stone.
The Stone Guardian launched his hand at me.
I evaded and meleed his hand and broke it off.
The Stone Guardian roared and then punched the ground many times with his other hand and then launched it at me.
I evaded and meleed his hand and broke it, too.
The Stone Guardian roared and kicked his legs.
I evaded and meleed it, breaking one.
The Stone Guardian roared and stomped the ground making rocks fall from the ceiling.
He kicked at me with his other leg, breaking it.
The stone Guardian roared and floated around.
I flew towards it and broke it's chest.
Its head flew around as fast as a race car.
Rocks kept falling.
I stopped it and meleed it, breaking it.
The Crystal orb stood in its place.

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#43 Jun 20, 2009 8:18 PM

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Chapter 22 Venomous snake

I grabbed the orb and flew up to Automay's camp and saw a dragon who said, "Where do you want to go?"
"Spring Plains." I replied.
The dragon brought up a portal and I ran through it.
I flew past the Flower Power cliff and saw a huge thing curled around the destroyed tree.
I flew to the top of the tree and saw that it was a giant snake.
Suddenly, the snake saw me and leaped at me, sending me into a huge forest, perfect for a fight.
The Snake landed on the ground and shot poison at me.
I evaded and shot a fireball at the head.
The Snake curled around me and squized me.
I flamed it and it let go.
The Snake dove underground and constantly jumped back out in differen't areas.
I meleed the Snake and made it's green color change orange.
The Snake shot poison balls out of it's mouth and around the area, also repeating it's other attacks.
I flamed the Snake's grip and then meleed it, changing its orange color to red.
The Snake shot beams of light from it's tail.
I dodged each of the beams and then the Snake shot it's poison balls and regular poison.
I evaded and then the Snake squizzed me.
I flamed it and then meleed it.
The Snake jumped up in the air and broke into 2 medium snakes.
They shot poison and moved really fast.
I meleed them both and they broke into 50 little snakes.
They each moved faster than before, also shotting poison.
I meleed them and defeated the Snake for good.
The last orb was sitting on a rock.
I grabbed the Orb and flew back to the cave.

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#44 Jun 22, 2009 5:42 PM

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Re: Fireball Season 2

Lots of Chapters here I had to catch up on. big_smile I liked the snake.

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Chapter 24 Bowser's courtyard

I looked into the dark portal ahead and walked into it.
I appeared on a huge platform.
Infront of me was a gate and a trapped dragon, "Help me!"
"I will once I get the key." I said.
"Watch out for the Huge beast called the Carhnorige, he guards the courtyard. Uh oh, here he comes now!" cried the dragon.
I turned around and saw a huge firery monster.
The monster roared and shot Fireballs at me.
I dodged them and shot a fireball at him, but it only made him bigger.
"I can't fight him, I need to come back with something to defeat him." I said to myself.
I ran towards the gate for I'd get away from the monster, but it was locked.
A sign on it said:

Go Away, inless you want to feal my wrath. To get through this gate, you must get every Dragon Emerald in the Dragon Kingdom, there is 4 in each Realm.

- King Bowser

I ran behind the Fire monster and into the dark portal.
I appeared back in Spring Plains.
I went back to the Dragon at the Bee King's lair and told him where I wanted to go.
"Oh no! Summer Forest, Icy Peaks, and Autumn Forest are surrounded by dark energy. We can't get there!" cried the Dragon.

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#47 Jul 25, 2009 5:11 PM

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Chapter 25 Rocky rocks

I glided towards where I fought the Snake and found a hole inside some thorns.
I flamed demolished them with fire and then went down the hole.
It lead to a pathway.
I walked down it until I reached another hole leading to a mountain.
Climbing it, I found a dragon.
"I wouldn't go up there if I were you. A strange creature is waiting up there." warned the Dragon.
I kept climbing until I reached the top.
A huge pile of Rocks sat there.
Suddenly, they formed into a Rock Titan.
I meleed its legs.
It punched me and then lost its legs.
The Rock Titan smashed the ground sending waves of energy.
I dodged them and meleed its fists as they tried to punch me.
They broke of and the Rock Titan grabbed some around the arena and threw them with its tail.
I dodged them and then spit a rock at his face, knocking him to the ground.
I attacked its head until it busted, leaving behind a Dragon Emerald.

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#48 Sep 26, 2009 7:41 PM

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Chapter 26 Esacpe from the Hut

I went to the dragon.
"You may go to Summer Hideaway now." said the Dragon.
"Take me there." I said.
The dragon made a portal appear.
I went through it and appeared outside the hut again.
I went inside and to the top of it.
A fire was blazing,
A spark landed on the floor and the hut caught fire.
I tried to put it out by blowing on it, but it didn't work.
The fire spread all over.
The exit was blocked by a falling piece of the ceiling.
I busted open the fire extinguisher glass and put out the fire with the exstinguisher.
I ran down the steps and was blocked again.
I tried to put it out, but the exstinguisher wouldn't work.
I pushed furniture over the fire to stop it from getting on me.
I ran through to the door, but it was also blocked.
Crashing through a window, I fell on to the sandy floor.
I had escaped.
The hut burned to ashes as the owner screamed in terror.
An Emerald appeared to be under the hut when it was built.
I grabbed it.

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#49 Oct 05, 2009 10:15 PM

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Chapter 27 AutoJune

I went to the dragon.
"Autumn Forest is now saved." the dragon said.
"Can I go there?" asked Fireball.
"Of coarse." replied the dragon, opening a portal.
I went to Autumn Forest and to AutoMay's remaining camp.
A wooden figure stood at the flagpole.
"Automay!" I cried.
"AutoJune to you!" said Automay's clone.
"AutoJune, whatever. I'm taking you down!" I cried.
"Oh really?" AutoJune charged at me.
He shot his wooden arms at me and did the same attacks Automay did.
I flamed 1/2 of his arms.
He wacked me away.
I flamed 2/2 arms.
He lost his arms and started kicking at me.
I flamed 1/2 feet.
He kicked me away.
I flamed 2/2 feet.
He shot lazers out of his eyes.
I flamed his head and killed him.
An emerald, glimmering brightly, sat in his place.
I took the golden emerald and went to the dragon, 3/4 emeralds to go.

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#50 Nov 12, 2009 1:20 AM

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