#1 Aug 26, 2009 12:59 AM

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The Legend of Spyro's Siblings: Dusk and Shineye

Dusk and Shineye

Hey, everyone! Here’s my new THOSS, Dusk and Shineye. This one is the romance/adventure story between Dusk, a Shadowsucker, and Shineye, a Light Bearer. It’s got a similar feel and plotline to Twilight, however I usually add more adventure than romance in my stories. Also, all my romance is LIGHT, therefore you don’t have to worry about any mature content, besides kissing. Anyway, I hope you enjoy my latest installment, and please review!

Prologue: Independent, no discipline
Time: 5 years into Cynder’s rein of the world

“Hm, it’s working as planned.” Cynder said approvingly, lashing her scythe-tipped tail. “My forces are holding up well. Not much stands in my way.” She gazed down from her castle into the endless battlefield below, where apes marched in huge masses. “The battles rage on. But I will soon win. Nothing stands in my way.” Cynder sighed and turned to leave, but before she could resign to her quarters, she heard rapid shouts coming from her army. Swinging her head around, she ran up to her window and looked across the field to see one side of her army in particular was causing the shouts. She spread her giant wings and dove out the window, gliding above her army. She came to the place where they were yelling, to see ape dropping like flies with no source or reason. Something was terrorizing them from the ground, not air. Cynder saw that it moved along the line of apes, and many of them collapsed. Cynder flew frantically over to the top of her castle, to see when the thing would break out from the army and into the field in front of here castle. Right as the last ape on the edge of the army fell, what looked like moving shadows darted over to the base of her castle, where she couldn’t see them. She walked closer to the edge, but before she could peer down, 4 shapes clawed there way up to where she was, and climbed onto the stone platform. Cynder was instantly relieved. The shapes were actually young, solid black dragons with glowing neon crests, 3 with brown underbellies, one with red. They were also smaller than here, and did not look threatening. In fact, they looked like kids. Cynder found herself stifling a laugh. “What do we have here?” She said, pacing forward and stretching her wings to look intimidating. “A few lost draklings, perhaps? You came to the wrong place, huns. But sadly, I’m not lighthearted, even for little kids. You’re not escaping without a few scars.” She grinned maliciously at them. She waited for them to start crying or shake with fear, but these reactions never came. Instead, the small dragons paced forward to her, their eyes glittering. “Wow, look at the size of this one!” One of the males with the brown underbellies spoke, his voice fairly young. “I think her shadow will be better than the apes!” Another male said. They all completely ignored the introduction Cynder had given them, and advanced as though fearless of the huge dragon. Cynder stared at them in shock. Kids weren’t afraid of the mighty Cynder? “Oh, you’d like to stay and fight, children?” She lashed her tail and hit it onto the stone to show its power. The female one, with the red underbelly, shrugged her shoulders. “I could use dessert.” She said to the others. Cynder practically stumbled backward. Dessert? What kind of sick joke is this? “Hey, Bane, you have to share!” The last male complained. He had black horns compared to the others who had the glowing ones, and had rings pierced on them and his wings. “Last time we got a good shadow, you sucked up more of it then all of us!” “Oh, be quiet, Dusk!” Bane spat back. Cynder was becoming more and more wary. If they aren’t afraid, something must be up. “Well, let’s just suck her shadow and get it over with.” The first male said again. To Cynder’s horror, small droplets of drool appeared on the corners of their mouthes’. Bane licked her lips, and the others moved even closer. Cynder began to back up. “Hey, wait!” She debated. “Do you know who I am? I’m Cynder, the terrifi…” They were really drooling now. “Man, her shadow smells deliciously!” The second male said, taking a sniff of her scales. “Hey wait! I take back what I said earlier! You can leave!” Cynder said, flustered as the edge of the stone platform. “Leave?” Bane said, smirking at the older dragon. “Why would we do that? We have dessert right here.” For once in Cynder’s life, she felt fear. These dragons seemed to be cannibals; she looked like a meal to them. Not waiting, she turned on her heels and flew off at full speed, not looking back. “Ah, look, you let her get away!” The first male complained. “It’s not my fault, Shade! You and Dusk were the ones complaining!” Bane responded tartly.“Hey, what about me?” The second male protested.
“Murk, stay out of this.”
“Hey, if we follow her, we can still catch her!” Dusk suddenly announced, and took off before talking to his friends. “Hey, Dusk! No fair!” Bane quickly took off after him. “Yeah, I get the first bite!” Shade said after her. “Ah, guys! Wait for me!” Murk called, much slowly then the others. Cynder craned her head to see that the dragons were following her. “Master, Help me!” She mentally begged. They were gaining on her like little torpedoes, speeding with open mouths. Suddenly, she began to feel excruciating pain pulse through her back end, feeling as though something was being yanked from her in the most violent way. “What’s happening?!” She cried out, and looked back to see the dragons eating (no, sucking) a dark substance that seemed to come from her body. She suddenly felt dizzy, and her powerful wings felt frail. “Master…Help me!” She begged again, beginning to fall… “Ow, hey!” Bane’s sucking was cut off and she was rubbing her mouth. “What was that?” Dusk complained, the same reaction. The Shadowsuckers hovered where she fell, dazed, as Cynder spiraled away for dear life. As soon as she’d lost them, she landed, huffing, and feeling dizzy from the material they’d sucked away from here. “I managed to break away, thanks to the Master’s powers.” She tapped her collar around her neck gratefully. She stumbled slightly, realizing she was out of breath and feeling very weak. “I must report these creatures to my Master!” She puffed, and limped her way back to her castle. As soon as she climbed the spiral stairs, she entered her chamber room and approached a musty dark mirror covered in stains. “Master, awaken!” She commanded, and the mirror exploded with swirling colors, before revealing the menacing yellow eyes of Malefor. “What would you like, servant?”
“I have a report to make about strange dragons I encountered today.” She spoke, her voice shaky.
“Strange dragons, they were. Solid black, more so then me, with neon crests. Kids as well, I assume…”
“Get on it with, servant!” Malefor hissed. “O-of course, master!” She said quickly. “Anyway, they destroyed about half my army, and almost did the same to me!” “Oh?” Malefor said, his eyes glinting with curiosity. “And how did they do that?”
“Er, I’m not sure exactly,” Cynder said, shifting her paws uncomfortably. “It was hard to explain. They were sucking this black substance from my scales, and I suddenly felt shaky…”
“Shadowsuckers.” Malefor interrupted her. “Shoulda known they’d show up eventually…” He seemed to be talking with himself now, so Cynder chose not to ask what he was muttering about. Then, his yellow eyes flickered toward her. “Those dragons, Cynder, were Shadowsuckers, a very independent species. They may seem like ordinary dragons, but they’re more of parasites than anything. No discipline whatsoever. They feed off of other creatures’ shadows, leaving the victims permanently stoned, collapsing to the ground instantly. You were lucky you managed to escape them, even if you used my help.” She bowed her head. “Master, these ‘Shadowsuckers’ wiped out half of my army, and took a fair amount of my shadow, as well. I ask for your help in keeping me and my army safe, for there may be other of these dragons running loose in our realm.”
“Indeed there is.” Malefor spoke confidently. “And they are much worse than the kids you encountered, who were probably just looking for a snack. But I will make sure they do not stand in our way.” A glowing purple scroll materialized in front of Cynder. “Call a meeting tomorrow of the realm, and show their leader this scroll, written by me. Tell them that by law of the Dark Master, the kids must return the shadows to the army and you immediately.”
“I will do that, Master.” Cynder said, grabbing the scroll in her jaws. “Also!” Malefor called as she began to walk away. “I’d like you to say one last thing, also written in my scroll, to ensure they will not return. Tell them that have been banned from this realm as long as I have reign over it. They are not to set a claw on our land while I am in power.”
“Of course, master.” Cynder muffled through the scroll clasped in her mouth, and the mirror swirled back to its’ musty color. Cynder turned back her head and paced out of the castle with new confidence. With these dragons out of the way, nothing could go wrong with her plan. And she was right; in fact, these dragons obeyed Malefor’s law with some regret and left the realm for places unknown, never to be seen for the next 8 years. But this did not mean they wouldn’t return. Oh no, they would most definitely come back to their plentiful realm, and that is where our story begins, shortly after Spyro and Cynder saved the world and the reign of Malefor ceased…

Alright, here’s the prologue for my new story. I will have the first chapter up soon. Please leave comments!


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#2 Aug 30, 2009 2:23 PM

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Re: The Legend of Spyro's Siblings: Dusk and Shineye

Yay finally a new story big_smile

Nice start... sounds bad O_o but I guess it will get exciting ^^

Oh btw I don't know if I have said this but I love your light romantic stories ^^

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Re: The Legend of Spyro's Siblings: Dusk and Shineye

Hehe, thanks. I'm posting the first chapter today, so look forward to that.  Shinneye will make her first appearance in the chapter, so I'm pretty excited to post it. Check back!


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It's a good start but you might try to break it apart into a few different paragraghs at least... other wise it all runs together...

Also when you start a new paragragh skip one line and then start it smile

Just trying to help smile

Great start though


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Re: The Legend of Spyro's Siblings: Dusk and Shineye

Thanks for the advice. I'll give the paragraph thing a try!

Alright, here’s the first chapter! Enjoy and please leave comments!

Chapter 1: Shinneye
Time: Approx. 1 month after Malefor was defeated and Spyro and Cynder returned to the temple.

        Shinneye blinked the sleep out of her eyes as she stretched out her wings, waking up. Dewdrops hung from the tips of her horns, and she shook them off with a shake of her head. Shinneye was a Light Bearer dragon; a rare species that carried pure energy and had the ability to make others around her feel good about themselves. Her scales were bright yellow, while her crest, tail-spike and wings were all a variation of rainbow. And her horns were curved and coiled, like springs of gold. Her egg had been found under temple ruins, oddly not smashed unlike the others around it. The elders vowed to give her away to another dragon family, where she would be safe from Malefor. The dragon family she was raised in had many children, so Shinneye grew up treated like any other dragon. She was popular to hang out with because of her feel-good ability, and always quite cheery, if not a bit clumsy and an overall ditz.       
     
She rose from her nest and padded out into the main den. “No one’s home.” She announced aloud when she walked in. She made her way over to the pile of moss by the TV, still tired but too lazy to walked back to her den. On the way, she tripped on a twig. “Ow, stupid twig!” She cursed at it. “That was not nice!” She gave it a final glare before turning her focus back on the moss. She curled up on it and leaned against the remote buried in the nest. She must’ve pressed on, for the TV flashed to life and the same news report seemed to occupy every channel:

BREAKING NEWS: Shadowsucker spotted in Mushroom Swamp?

“Good evening, everyone, I’m Shelly Seawing, coming at you with some very…shocking news.” The pretty blue water dragon began, holding a stack of papers in her hand and looking quite flustered, though she tried to hide it.  “According to our fellas back at the station, reports have been filing in about a Shadowsucker roaming our realm, not to long after Malefor has fallen, ma y I point out. Eye witnessed claim that last night, approximately 8:43, a lithe black silhouette was seen hovering over the swamp, close to the river. It has been described to look faintly like a dragon, only much smaller and faster in the air. We have Glacier on the scene to give us more details about the sighting. Glacier?” The screen sliced in half to reveal a male ice dragon, shaking frantically and rustling his papers. “Y-yes,” Glacier started when he saw the camera was on, fear glazed on his eyes. “G-good evening, e-everyone. I’m l-live here f-from w-where the S-S-Shadowsucker was spotted. H-he was s-seen g-gliding over t-this river b-behind m-me l-l-late last night.” His gaze flickering at every movement as he spoke. “Though i-it h-has y-yet t-to c-c-claim any v-victims, w-we a-advise you t-to n-n-not l-leave your d-dens after t-the s-sun f-falls.” It seemed as though he wanted to fly off the set any second as he finished, looking around at the sleeping swamp surrounding him. “Thank you, Glacier,” Shelly concluded, feeling sympathy for the terrified ice dragon. His image disappeared and was replaced with the water dragon once more. “Anyway, there is still no solid proof that what we saw was a Shadowsucker, and request that you do not panic. We will get it under control immediately, and until then, please do not wander past our lamps when the sun is down. We say this only for your own safety, and hope you have a relaxing evening. This has been Shelly Seawing, coming to you from DBC news.”
     
She concluded her sentence and the TV switched to a commercial. “Shadowsuckers…” Shinneye mused, wide-awake now. “It can’t be! No way!” She was shaking her head with shock. As a drakling, Shinneye had been told horror stories by her siblings about Shadowsuckers, and was taught to fear them. Even now, Shinneye has a known fear of them. “Relax, Shinneye,” She told herself. “They're only stories, remember? They aren’t real! This report was false! There nothing but myths. Ehehehe…” She gave her head a final shake before rising from the moss, in high spirits. “Well, here’s to another great day!” She announced happily. “I’m going for a glide.” She began to walk to the entrance of her den, when the sound of her stomach growling entered her ears. “Actually, guess I’m pretty hungry,” She admitted, blushing, and went back to where the food was stored. She took out a handful of berries and popped them into her mouth one by one, savoring their tart flavor. “Shadowsuckers…” She said again, through her mouthful of berries. She couldn’t stop herself from giving a shiver. She had a flash back of her siblings, when they would pass around a flashlight in the dark and describe the Shadowsuckers:
      “Their scales are blacker than a midnight with no stars,” Flick, an older rock dragon began to his younger sisters and brothers, the flashlight the only source of light in the entire dark cave. “Their crests glow neon, and you can tell when they’re hungry because small droplets of black drool begin to hang from their mouths.” He leaned closer to his shaking siblings, and continued. “The search the night for unexpecting victims, and when they see them, they become a predator. You know when ones near you because you get this uncertainty in the pit of your belly, and breath very slowly. Meanwhile, the Shadowsucker advances over to where you air, and the crickets stop chirping. You can tell something horrible is about to happen. And then, right as you slowly crane your head…BAM!” He leaped at his siblings, and they screamed with horror. “The Shadowsucker bowls you over, and opens his wide jaws. You try to scream, but realize you can’t, and suddenly it feels like your skin is being ripped apart. Struggle as you may, the Shadowsucker will eat your soul right out of you, and before you know it, your out like a light.” Right a she finished, he flicked the Flashlight off. The little draklings screamed and huddled together, shaking madly. “…Flick?” Shinneye, one of the draklings at the time, asked with uncertainty. But there brother was no where to be seen. “Flick?” She repeated, her voice breaking. Suddenly, a shape lunged at the group, knocking them over. “RAWR!” The shape yelled. “I AM A SHADOWSUCKER! I WANT TO SUCK YOUR SOOUULL!”
“AHHH!” Shinneye yelped and dashed across the room. “Ahaha.” Flick laughed, turning the flashlight back on. “It’s just me, you guys. But man, did you see the look on your faces?” He chuckled. “That’s enough, Flick.” An elderly voice said from the hall. “Mom!” Shinneye squealed when their mother stepped into the room. “The Shadowsuckers are gwonna get me!” The elderly dragon patted her head. “Little Shinneye, Shadowsuckers aren’t real.” She reassured. “There just stories.” “Stowies?” She asked. “Yes, stories. Now, come on, time for bed.” She took the other draklings, gave a glare at Flick, and left the den…

     Shinneye finished off her berries, and shook her head a last time. “There’s no such thing as Shadowsuckers. Mum said so.” She assured herself. “I know, I’ll visit Spyro and Cynder to get my mind off it!” At the time, Spyro and Cynder were living at the temple with the three guardians. She was best friends with Cynder; perhaps it was Cynder’s dark past that made the shadow dragon enjoy being around a cheery, feel-good dragon like Shinneye. She spread her multi-color wings and took off into the sky, over to the direction of the temple. She made a smooth landing in the front, and trotted in.

“Hello?” She called. “Spyro? Cynder?” She got no response. She carefully paced into the dark temple, but her friends were nowhere to be seen. “Weird,” She mused. It seemed that the temple was abandoned. She began humming to herself to occupy the quiet. Suddenly she saw a flash of scales. “Huh?” She whirled around, and her eye caught a color in the darkness; a neon blue. She gasped. “Who’s there?" She demanded. “Come out or I’ll…I’ll…” She put a claw to her chin, and put on a puzzled look. “Actually, I don’t know what I’d do.” What sounded like a quiet chuckle came from the darkness, but no dragon showed. Instead, the figure seemed to scoot out of the room, using the door Shinneye came in. She watched the door seconds after it had made its’ escape, and decided it would be best to leave the room. She saw the giant dragon statue, and heard the sound of someone talking in the other room. She trotted across and opened the door into the den, where she saw Spyro, Cynder, and the rest of the guardians gathered around a TV set. Shinneye instantly recognized Shelly Seawing, the news dragon, though the headline was different from when she saw her:

UPDATE: Shadowsucker sightings no longer just on edge of realm. Near temple???

“Good morning, again, everyone. It’s me, Shelly Seawing, making a second report since our original this morning. I’m afraid to say that the Shadowsucker had been seen once more, and this time closer to the heart of the realm. A report just came in that it was seen prowling around the temple at about 11: 03.” Shinneye’s breath caught in her throat; she had just entered the temple at 11:02. “Apparently our theory about Shadowsuckers coming out at night was false. They have no boundaries when to leave. We advise to stay inside your dens and lock your doors until we find more information. We’ll have a new update soon, so please patiently wait in your den and once again, do not panic. This is Shelly Seawing, DBC news.” The TV turned off. “Unbelievable.” Spyro breathed. “Who would’ve known?”
       “Hey, everyone,” Shinneye called, and they turned their heads to see her. “Shinneye!” Cynder exclaimed, getting up from the moss and hugging her best friend. She quickly let go, and looked at her, pretty worried. “You shouldn’t have come here! Didn’t you see the news?”
“I did, just now.” Shinneye admitted. “Actually, I…” She stopped herself. She decided it would be best if she didn’t mention her encounter with the supposed “Shadowsucker.”
“…Saw the news this morning, but left right after.”
“Your lucky you didn’t get attacked by one.” Spyro said, going over to where they stood. The guardians rose to their paws. “That was a risky thing to do, Shinneye,” Terrador told her. “I believe it’d be best if you stay in the temple for the night. You don’t want to be the first victim.” “So there not myths?” Shinneye blurted out. Terrador did not respond, just left the room without a word. Volteer looked like he wanted to say a bunch, but refrained from doing so. And Cyril refused to make eye contact. “You know, it’s weird,” Cynder said, gazing up. “I have this déjà vu about the Shadowsuckers. I swear I’ve heard the name before, but I just can’t get my tongue on it.”
       “Come on, Shinneye, we’ll go do some training.” Spyro suggested after a long silence, and Shinneye slowly nodded. They followed the guardians out of the door, and caught a snippet of what Terrador was saying; “Should have known they show up.” He whispered darkly. “Perhaps I ceased to think about it, since I never thought Malefor would fall. But he did. And the celebration of it will be short lived.” Shinneye suppressed a shudder. What did he mean? And what’s more, if she had indeed encountered a Shadowsucker when she first entered the temple, why hadn’t she been attacked?

Ok, here’s my first chapter! Hope you like it so far. Oh, and if you didn’t catch it, the Shadowsucker in the temple was Dusk. And the story’s called, “Dusk and Shinneye”. Just giving a few future hints, so stay tuned!


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Nice story so far ^^

I can sense that it is going to be a very good story ^^

Cookies to you :3 lol

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Ohhhhh exciting O_o
MUST READ THE NEXT CHAPTER xD lol

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Alright, here’s next chap! Hope u enjoy and please leave comments!

Chapter 3: Attack at Mrs. Silverwings

Shinneye dreamed she was walking through the forest outside the temple, her scales giving off a faint glow as she walked. For some unknown reason, she felt as though she had to be silent, like she was trying to avoid being seen. She walked into a large clearing, a glowing tree studded with blue blossoms shining through the darkness. This was where she had to be. She approached it, and right as she did a flash of black scales caught her eye. Suddenly, a shadow paced from the trees beyond, and though the image was blurred, there was no doubt a neon blue color shining above it. It was a Shadowsucker. But strangest of all, she was not afraid. In fact, she felt safe. And she found her legs approaching the shadow, carrying her to her fate…or what seemed like her fate…

Shinneye awoke with a jolt, breathing hard. The nest beside hers was empty, as was Spyros’. She suddenly felt very alone. Shinneye sprung from her nest, and left the den into the main temple room. “No new news.” Terradors’ voice came from behind her, and she spun around to see the earth dragon. “DBS has been very quiet this morning, so I think we’ll be safe for a while.” Shinneye should have felt relieved, but her dream haunted her. What did that Shadowsucker want from her? She shivered in spite of herself. “Where are Spyro and Cynder?” She asked. “They went to Mrs. Silverwings’ early to help set up for the party. You can join them if you like.”
“Thanks, I think I will”! Shinneye replied, back to her cheery self, and went out onto the temple padio.

Spreading her wings, Shinneye took off into the sky, toward the clearing that was owned by Mrs. Silverwing. Mrs. Silverwing was possibly the most rich dragon in the realm. Both the inside and outside of her den was studded with rubies, sapphires, emeralds, you name it. And her backyard was a stretch of open field, where the party would be hosted. Shinneye landed smoothly on it, where many dragons were hoisting large wooden picnic tables over to the middle of the field. She saw Spyro and Cynder carrying over one of the tables, and when over to them.

“Hey guys!” She called. They turned to her and smiled. “Hey, Shinneye!” She helped them bring the table over to the correct spot. “This is gonna be a big party.” Spyro puffed. “I heard almost everyone in the dragon realms is coming!” This made Shinney feel safer. The more dragons, the last chance of being attacked individually by a Shadowsucker. She helped for the rest of the morning, and right around noon the party guests began to arrive. Shinneye watched as they filled up the whole field, holding champagne glasses and laughing as though being in the open was no threat. “See?” Shinneye muttered to herself. “Nothing to worry about!”
“Hey, Shinneye!” Shinneye immediately recognized the voice as Flicks’ and turned to see her siblings and parents enter the field. “Where’ve you been?”
“I’ve been staying at the temple.” Shinneye explained to her older brother. “You know, with the Shadowsuckers and all.”
“Tales for draklings!” Her brother said when she finished. “You remember what mom made me tell you; there’s no such thing as Shadowsuckers!” Flick then went over to his friends, who were chatting nearby. Shineye’s mom told her she could stay at the temple as many nights as she’d like, so Shinneye decided she would stay there for the next few days.

She went over to the food table and helped herself to some snacks, for once completely happy and relaxed since she had seen the report. The party games were due to start right after dinner, the sun began to set, which came much faster than anyone ever realized. “I’m gonna win every one!” Flick exclaimed as Mrs. Silverwing gathered everyone together for dinner before the games. The tables were covered with all kinds of delicacies, and people began to watch impatiently when they would be aloud to grab plates. But little did they know, there would never be dinner. At least, not for them…

“Look at them all! A feast!” Bane’s voice whispered as the four Shadowsuckers hung in the trees surrounding the clearing. “I say we get their shadows now!”
“I agree.” Shade said. “Now is the perfect time.”
“Ok then!” Bane exclaimed. Black droplets of drewl hung from her mouth. “On my signal, we attack…”

Mrs. Silverwing finally said dinner was ready. The older dragons began to grab plates and line up, heaping them with the food. Shinneye was at the front, and began piling her plate with the food. A feeling of uncertainty suddenly began to pick at her as she filled her plate. Then, Shinneye could have sworn she saw a flash of black dart out from the trees, but ignored it. But then, she heard the sound of breaking glass, followed by a piercing shriek. Everyone spun around to see a dragon behind her collapse on the ground, its’ scales a dull gray. “What the?...” Before one of the dragons could finish their sentence, a black and neon dragon leaped onto the food table. “Hello, dragons!” She said, her voice hissing with triumph. “I hope you don’t mind if we join you for dinner!” It was then someone finally said it; “…SHADOWSUCKER!” Screams filled the clearing, and everyone dropped there plates and flew for their lives. “Wait!” Spyro called as Shinneye prepared to leave herself. “We can’t just leave! We have to help everyone out!” Shinneye new this was true, and folded her wings. She was terrified, but had to stay on ground level as she began escorting everyone out. “Ok, everyone, just stay calm!” Spyro yelled over the shrieking crowd. 4 black blurs spread around the crowd, and occasionally a dragon would collapse onto the field floor. Shinneye was helping a younger dragon get in the air when she saw a Shadowsucker up close. And the one she saw was no ordinary one; it was the same one she’d seen in the temple. “Leave!” She hissed at it. But the Shadowsucker didn’t move. It sidestepped over, but didn’t attempt to suck her shadow. Instead, its’ eyes gleamed, and it flicked it’s tail. “What’ll you do to me if I don’t? You’re ‘not sure what you’d do?’ ” Shinneye couldn’t believe it; this Shadowsucker was taunting her! “I wouldn’t, Shadowsucker!” She warned. “I may be a klutz, but I’ll take you!”
“My name’s Dusk,” He corrected her. She aimed a swipe at him, but he danced out of the way. She fell face flat, and he leered at her. “You are a klutz,” He teased. “Oh yeah?” Shinneye retorted. “If I’m such a klutz, why not just suck my shadow now?” Dusk looked taken aback. But he quickly covered it with another sneer. “I never did catch your name. What is it?”
“Shinneye.” Shinneye responded tartly. She was surprised she’d even answered. “Shinneye, huh?” He muttered. “Nice name.”
“Leave!” Shinneye said again, breathing a stream of light at him. He backed off. “Ok, ok.” He said quickly, and disappeared in the crowd of dragons. “What an arrogant airhead!” Shinneye muttered. She quickly remembered the task at hand and went to help the other dragons. Now, the clearing was pretty much empty, except for the victims. The Shadowsuckers must’ve left, because they were no where to be seen. Shinneye quickly scanned the dragons lying on the floor. She her mother and siblings crowded around one in particular, and scampered over to see. She immediately recognized the dark brown scales; it was Flick. Shinneye gasped. “No…” She muttered, looking at her stoned older brother with shock. Mrs. Silverwing looked like a mess; her wings were ruffled and she was pressing a paw to her forehead. “Everyone go.” She told the remaining dragons without looking up. “The party is over.”

Ok, leaving it at that! Please comment and stay tuned!


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#10 Sep 08, 2009 10:09 AM

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Re: The Legend of Spyro's Siblings: Dusk and Shineye

(Looks like I'm the only one there comment ^^" )

Ohhhh it is getting really exciting now O_O
Keep up the awesome work dude ^^
I think you are one of my favorite writters big_smile

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#11 Sep 19, 2009 8:14 AM

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#12 Sep 20, 2009 12:57 AM

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Re: The Legend of Spyro's Siblings: Dusk and Shineye

I had all intentions on reading this... but then things started happening and I never got around to it... it's too far along now..... I'm always busy it seams.....

Well at least I have now read the first few paragraphs.... lol.... I gave up... I have to write my fan fiction and I harly find time to do that.... lol..... sorry....

oh... just one other quick thing that I noticed:

Every time a different character speaks you are supposed to start a new paragragh.... just a minor organization problem... other wise it looks really nice smile

(I guess I will post my fan fiction on here now that I think about it... lol.... It'll be up sonn I guess if you want to read it)


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#13 Sep 20, 2009 6:32 AM

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Thanks for the advice. Heh, shows how much I know about format wink
Anyway, i made a few minor changes, though they the paragraph is by all means not flawless...Thanks again for the tip!


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#14 Sep 22, 2009 6:06 AM

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Now it is getting really exciting 8D
Keep up the awesome work big_smile

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#15 Oct 16, 2009 6:24 AM

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#16 Oct 17, 2009 1:52 PM

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Good story so far, keep it up

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#17 Oct 18, 2009 2:51 AM

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I like it too. Very good smile

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#18 Oct 18, 2009 9:21 PM

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You must write more

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#19 Oct 20, 2009 7:58 AM

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Once again a awesome chapter *claps* ^^

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#20 Jan 01, 2010 8:29 PM

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#21 Jan 10, 2010 2:45 AM

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#22 Jan 16, 2010 9:27 PM

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I've been reading this story for a while and I must say it is awesome! I love the suspense, and it's twists. Keep on writing!


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#23 Jan 16, 2010 9:33 PM

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coool story when is the next part

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Thank you all for the comments! They really help as a motivational boost. Anyway, still working on my next chapter, but I should have it up within this next week. Thx again!


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Alirght, here’s Chapter 7! School’s been rough with homework, but I’m going to try my best powering out chapters. By the way, the longer the chapter update, the higher the chance I will post two at once…I’m already planning to do that, though it will take some time. Anyway, enjoy!

Chapter 7: Discovered

“T-Terrador?” Shinneye asked, whirling around to see the earth guardian towering above her. He looked just as surprised as the other Shadowsuckers.

“I must say, I was not expecting this.” He admitted, looking from Shinneye to Dusk.

“Who’s this?” Dusk asked Shinneye.

“My name is Terrador.” Terrador spoke for her. “I’m the guardian of the earth element back at the Temple. Shinneye has been staying with us ever since the threat of you all came out. I noticed Shinneye’s odd behavior, so I decided to follow her.”

“But, how?” Shinneye stammered. “The potion-“

“I learned about the potion from the day I first detected it in my goblet. From a Sleepy Willow, I take? Harnessing the earth element, I know a great deal about plants. I’m surprised you failed to realize that.” Shinneye hung her head. “Anyway, when I realized how awake you were, it revealed to me you were the one who put the potion in. Obviously you were up to something, so I waited until dinner to clarify the potion was from you. Sure enough, I saw you pouring it into all but one goblet. I sent you out to get Spyro and Cynder, and then distributed the goblets, taking the potion-free one for myself. I followed you that night, and watched you reunite with the Shadowsucker here, revealing your romantic relations with him. But, I decided to wait for the potion to take effect on you before showing myself. After you fell, it took me a while to find you. Then I saw this whole episode here, and was about to attack this Shadowsucker when his clan asked him to suck your shadow. However, I admit I would have never guessed he‘d actually pick you over his own species.” Terrador turned to Dusk.

“Enlighten me, Shadowsucker. Why’d you do it?” Dusk paced forward, looking Terrador in the eyes.

“Shinneye is everything to me, ever since I saw her for the first time in your temple. Sure, she has her clumsy faults, but ever time I look into her eyes, see her glowing scales, my mind gets clouded and I forget she is suppose to be my prey. I love her, and she feels the same way. Even if it means abandoning my own species, I would never give her up.” Terrador blinked slowly, eyeing Dusk.

“Very interesting, the feelings you’ve developed.” He said after a while.

“I’ll have you know I was about to turn you all in when I realized she was with you. But all this has changed my mind. Now, I’m not sure what to think.” Shinneye stepped forward.

“Terrador, please, you have to understand,” She begged.

“Dusk…” She looked at the others. “Or Bane, Murk, and Shade would never suck anyone’s shadow for no reason. Think of it as eating Drakberries: technically, we’re killing the berries when we pick them, right? But we have to, for our food and survival. You have to understand.” Terrador considered, then dipped his head.

“Fair answer. Shinneye, how about a make a deal with you.” He turned the others. “With all of you. Shinneye may see Dusk as she pleases. And the other three of you are safe to carry on with your lives. However, first things first, you must all return the mortal dragon shadows you’ve taken from the party.” Terrador grabbed a handful of viles from behind his wing. “I did some research and learned about giving back shadows in the form of liquid. I assume you can all oblidge so I may return them to their loved ones.” Bane muttered something under her breath, but approached the viles. Terrador handed her enough for every shadow, and she regretfully blew the black stream of shadow into each one. They turned to a black sludge-like substance as they entered the vile. Shade, Murk, and Dusk also gave up their shadows. Terrador tucked away the bottles.

“Excellent.” He looked up into the dawn sky. “I suppose I should return. Much rejoicing will be held when I return the shadows. However, I have once last deal to make.” He eyed the Shadowsuckers carefully. “

Never again, under any circumstance, may you suck a mortal dragons’ shadow. I’m sorry, but that’s the way it was, and that’s the way it will be.” Bane opened her mouth to protest, but quickly closed it. “On that note, your free to leave. Shinneye, return when you will. I’ll make an excuse for why your missing.” Shinneye’s eyes glowed.

“Thank you, Terrador!” She exclaimed, dipping her head. He nodded.

“Of course. And maybe we can revive your brother Flick!”

“About that…” Shinneye said, feeling a lump in her throat when she remembered Dusk admitting something more powerful had taken her brother’s shadow. But Terrador had already taken off. Shinneye watched him go, sadness welling in her chest at the thought of Flick. But it quickly vanished when Dusk kissed her.

“This is brilliant, Shinneye!” He exclaimed, breaking the kiss. “We can be together! They no longer have to be night visits! And we’re off the hook, thanks to you the earth guardian! Great analogy with the berries back there! You’ve saved us.” He then turned to his denmates. “I believe you have someone to thank.” He teased. Bane’s eyes fell to the ground, her normally bold and sarcastic personality diminishing.

“Er…thanks.” She murmured.

"What's that Bane? Shinney can't hear you." Dusk said in a mocking tone.

"THANKS!" She yelled.

“Yeah, thanks.” Shade also admitted.

“We owe you one.” Murk said, dipping his head to Shinneye. Shinneye blinked with surprise at the bowing Shadowsuckers.

“Um…Don’t mention it?” She said, not sure how to respond. Dusk intertwined his tail with hers.

“Perfect.” He whispered to her. “Every issue is gone. My denmates are in debt to you, and your guardian has approved our relations. Even without my denmates, we can finally be together.” Shinneye nodded, kissing his cheek.

“Yup.” She looked back at the others, who were finishing muttering between themselves. Bane stepped forward.

“You know…” She began, speaking slowly as though she didn’t want to talk at all. “You did bail us out back there, Shinneye. I’m not light-hearted, but I think we can get used to you being with our denmate.” Dusk’s eyes widened.

“Who are you and what have you done to Bane!” He joked, realizing his denmate was indirectly allowing him to keep their alliance.

“Only because she helped us!” Bane quickly covered, but Dusk still couldn’t stop smiling.

“Sure, Bane, sure.” He turned to Shinneye and hugged her. “The ancestors have smiled upon us!” He exclaimed, twirling her around. Shinneye was in too much shock to respond.

“I…don’t know what to say.” She admitted as he set her down. Shade took a step forward.

“We’re sorry for all this.” He muttered. “But our denmate is our denmate. And a mate of his is a friend of ours.”

“…Yeah.” Bane slowly agreed, looking Shinneye in the eyes.

“I mean, I guess your is kinda cool…no, wait! I don’t mean that! Mortal dragons aren’t cool at all! Well, most aren’t…but you are, sort of…but you a moral dragon! Aurgh, what I’m I saying?!” The group broke into laughter, Shinneye chiming in. For once in a long time, Shinneye felt truly happy, standing here after being accepted by Dusk’s “family”.  The laughter slowly died down. However, a growl form Shinneye’s stomach broke the silence.  “

That’s right.” She said, embarrassed when she realized everyone was staring at her. “I didn’t eat dinner last night cause I was scared of the potion.” Dusk chuckled and kissed her cheek.

“Oh, Shinneye, your character never gets old.” He turned to his denmates. “Shall we show Shinneye all the berry patches around here?’ Shinneye beamed when they nodded.

“Finally, another girl!” Bane said as she walked past Shinneye. She suddenly tapped her shoulder. “Race ya!” And dashed off.

“Hey, wait! Shinneye called, running after her. As she ran, she couldn’t help by smile. Even her hunger seemed to diminish. Everything was so perfect! Terrador had returned the shadows, and her meetings with Dusk no longer had to be secret! However, this was too easy to be true…much too easy…

~In an unmapped area…
Gray stone stretched in a large clearing surrounded by sheer silvery cliffs, leafless trees growing out of cracks in the surface. The sun was crowded by black, not gray but black, clouds. on the top floor, was a group of invisible figures, voicing over their plans.
“The great comeback is near, is it not?” Said a creaky voice.

“Indeed it is. We are only so many shadows away from our final form.” Said another.

“But we have to hurry. Remember, if we wait until the shadows are dissolved, we will lose all our charged up energy and never receive the forms.”  The clearing was temporily silent. “We can’t afford to wait. In two days, we must suck as many shadows as we can so we can get a head start. Time is not on our side, but perhaps with that rogue breed around, our cover will stay secret until we are ready.” The others agreed.

“So, where is the best place to strike?”

"I think it's time we watch some mortal dragon news..."

Ok, leaving it there! Stay tuned!


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