You are not logged in.
- Topics: Active | Unanswered
Pages: 1
#1 May 01, 2009 1:08 PM
- DragonOfDrakness1992
- Member
- From: Danmark
- Registered: Nov 19, 2008
- Posts: 309
- Gems: 0
- Website
The Legend of Spyro: One's love
Offline
#2 May 01, 2009 4:16 PM
- Aceedwin
- Member
- From: London, but not Soho.
- Registered: Dec 31, 2008
- Posts: 4,324
- Gems: 0
Re: The Legend of Spyro: One's love
I find your piece somewhat dull, but on the other hand, introductions of fan fictions aren't usually works of art worthy of my serious approval.
English: It's not great, but it'll probably get better.
I wonder if I'll get told off for being slightly critical...
Offline
#3 May 01, 2009 6:38 PM
- DragonOfDrakness1992
- Member
- From: Danmark
- Registered: Nov 19, 2008
- Posts: 309
- Gems: 0
- Website
Re: The Legend of Spyro: One's love
This wasn't a comment I had hoped to get 
And it will get better... I will post the next chapter tomorrow...
Offline
#4 May 02, 2009 7:24 AM
- DragonOfDrakness1992
- Member
- From: Danmark
- Registered: Nov 19, 2008
- Posts: 309
- Gems: 0
- Website
Re: The Legend of Spyro: One's love
Offline
#5 May 03, 2009 6:54 PM
- DragonOfDrakness1992
- Member
- From: Danmark
- Registered: Nov 19, 2008
- Posts: 309
- Gems: 0
- Website
Re: The Legend of Spyro: One's love
Offline
#6 May 04, 2009 1:09 PM
- Aceedwin
- Member
- From: London, but not Soho.
- Registered: Dec 31, 2008
- Posts: 4,324
- Gems: 0
Re: The Legend of Spyro: One's love
... An entire chapter based on awkwardness and emotional restraint? Introduce someone abstract, that'll shake things up. Remember, the key to a good story is the ability to react as your characters and grow their personalities as experiences stack up.
Romance is a useless focus. If romance is in a story, it should be no more than a major plot device. Any book that goes further will be terrible *cough*twilight*cough*.
May I also remind you that constructive criticism is better than blind complimenting anyway. I'm good at analysing books to see their strengths and weaknesses as works of art and not mere enjoyability (although it does come into it obviously). Fan fiction is always lacking like that. No don't even bother being hurt.
Don't bother being hurt, it won't help your skills as a writer.
Offline
#7 May 04, 2009 3:57 PM
- DragonOfDrakness1992
- Member
- From: Danmark
- Registered: Nov 19, 2008
- Posts: 309
- Gems: 0
- Website
Re: The Legend of Spyro: One's love
Offline
#8 May 04, 2009 6:07 PM
- Aceedwin
- Member
- From: London, but not Soho.
- Registered: Dec 31, 2008
- Posts: 4,324
- Gems: 0
Re: The Legend of Spyro: One's love
... Right... It's just the fact that you were complaining about not having any comments, it led me to the conclusion that either you are looking for comments to see how you're doing and how you could do better, or you are incredibly vain and just want compliments. Hmmm... You're not getting the whole idea of comments I feel.
Offline
#9 May 04, 2009 6:11 PM
- DragonOfDrakness1992
- Member
- From: Danmark
- Registered: Nov 19, 2008
- Posts: 309
- Gems: 0
- Website
Re: The Legend of Spyro: One's love
Hmm okay... and this have made me to think what I thought from the start...
This website sucks so much with that I don't get good comments so I will stop post anything of my two fanfics here...
Thanks for reminding me how much this site sucks...
Offline
#10 May 04, 2009 6:17 PM
- Aceedwin
- Member
- From: London, but not Soho.
- Registered: Dec 31, 2008
- Posts: 4,324
- Gems: 0
Re: The Legend of Spyro: One's love
Hmmm... Am I supposed to be upset? Let's face it, if you're idiotic enough to believe that you are perfect and only deserve praise, I doubt anybody wants you about.
If you won't accept that you will only get good comments when you accept ideas and critisicm, you won't get any good comments. I'm suprised you refuse to believe this actually. I mean, blaming it on the site... Please... I think I'm the only one here who puts learning above feelings.
If you just want to write for fun, don't whine about not getting comments.
Offline
#11 May 04, 2009 6:22 PM
- DragonOfDrakness1992
- Member
- From: Danmark
- Registered: Nov 19, 2008
- Posts: 309
- Gems: 0
- Website
Re: The Legend of Spyro: One's love
Frist: no you should not be upset about this...
It is only my problem...
And yeah I know that some people want to emprove themselfs but I will not becuase I can't use it to anything...
I can't write different then I already do so it wouldn't help to hear comments like that...
And comments like that make me in a really bad mood and it ruins the rest of my day.
Offline
#12 May 14, 2009 7:11 PM
- DragonOfDrakness1992
- Member
- From: Danmark
- Registered: Nov 19, 2008
- Posts: 309
- Gems: 0
- Website
Re: The Legend of Spyro: One's love
Offline
#13 May 14, 2009 7:12 PM
- DragonOfDrakness1992
- Member
- From: Danmark
- Registered: Nov 19, 2008
- Posts: 309
- Gems: 0
- Website
Re: The Legend of Spyro: One's love
Offline
#14 May 14, 2009 7:14 PM
- DragonOfDrakness1992
- Member
- From: Danmark
- Registered: Nov 19, 2008
- Posts: 309
- Gems: 0
- Website
Re: The Legend of Spyro: One's love
Offline
#15 May 14, 2009 10:10 PM
- Spyro&Cynder4ever
- Member
- From: the place inbetween a dream an
- Registered: May 10, 2009
- Posts: 132
- Gems: 0
- Website
Re: The Legend of Spyro: One's love
So far really good! this is interesting!
Spyro&Cynder4ever
"Why won't you fight back?!"
"You left me with nothing to fight for"
Offline
#16 May 18, 2009 7:00 PM
- DragonOfDrakness1992
- Member
- From: Danmark
- Registered: Nov 19, 2008
- Posts: 309
- Gems: 0
- Website
Re: The Legend of Spyro: One's love
Offline
Pages: 1